i love this piece and thank u so much for the mention

ur pieces are perfect in their imperfect kinda way!

much love

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~.~ Lozza ~.~

Everything happens for a reason...

You are with me for all the reasons in the world!

Thank you. You were an excellent friend all week, as usual. I hope the new year is full of awesomeness.

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Don't.

Advanced Critique Encouraged?
Ahhhh Ghosts?!?!
scary.


mmmm.. The political 'up at at em'' vein in it gives me all the good tingles. I do love political activism and revolutions. I hope to participate in one someday. I think it definitely captures the spirit of woodford in essence, particular that under current that this year had what with the monsoons. I like the fire - because it relates and its real.

my only real point of sale is;
and the ocean wrapped a lotus round the fallen tyrant's rage - I think maybe the reference is a little obscure.
But hell its poetry - and you're allowed a little obscurity. i know what my tutors would say... and those unimaginative little bunnies in my tuts. Restrictive bunch that they are.

I don't know danny boy.

I like the way you empower your readers with imagery of the brimstone in the soul and all the things we hope to achieve. I like your melancholy.

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Touch your thighs I'm the lonely one
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Thank you. Oi loik in dipth commints.

I hate that line. That line hates me. The Lotus line took up about half of the two hours it took to write this and it still hates me. Now that there aren't criteria I'm thinking of taking another whack at it.

Your words are lovely. Thank you.


Sorry we didn't meet at Woodford. There was less work-free time than last year and a lot of it was spent sleeping or aimlessly wandering. Because I'm such a party animal. I hope you had a good time.

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Don't.

Some great ideas in this piece, I like it

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It doesn't hurt to be nice!

Thanks

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Don't.

Usually I feel.. Floored by your work, and find it very hard to find words to describe what I feel.. But this one feels.. lacking, (for 'lack' of a better word). It feels too.. verbose. Its like you need to lose the wording to find the meaning.. the message, the theme. It just seems to.. dense.. too work through.

Maybe it does need to be read out loud, and It still conjures up wonderful imagery.. (ahh, Straddy... sunrises.. *falls into a pit of despair*) but, it feels like.. almost.. too much.

It gives a message.. 'Hateful. Mortal.' - good line.. but still, too.. I don't know.. wordy.

I think I made my point. But probably not. I still aspire to write like you.

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-Elly- was Here.

honestly i like the new edit of that line hehe doesn't seem so out of place..... are u satisifed with it yet? writing is a slow process and art!

hope all is well for u

all my love :heart

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~.~ Lozza ~.~

Everything happens for a reason...

You are with me for all the reasons in the world!

excellent, i love it.
i'd forgotten the quality of your work.
keep it up.

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There's no such thing as talent.
There is only desire.